Crazy

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Don't say that your not crazy,
Because everyone knows you are.
Just because of the incident,
When you were driving in your car.
Now you drive me nuts,
All the things you say.
I hate being with you,
every single day.
Even though your family,
You just have to leave me alone.
Even when the lights are on,
I know that no one is home.
When I am here too long,
I start acting crazy too,
But I just want you to know,
That I am not you.




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Interesting topic, I like it! Good work, I like your poems, hope to hear more!

-- M.B.Author
Listen to advice and except discipline so that you
may be wise for the rest of your life
-- Proverbs 19:20




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The rhyming pattern length was trivial and, I thought, interrupting in some places, but I am so critical on the topic of rhyming!
I think it might help define the poem a little better if you divided it into stanzas based on the rhyming pattern you used.
But I liked it, oh, and one grammatical error I noticed (your should be you're in the first line).



For according to the trollish philosopher Plateau, "if you wants to understan' an enemy, you gotta walk a mile in his shoes. Den, if he's still your enemy, at least you're a mile away and he's got no shoes."
— A Blink of the Screen by Terry Pratchett