Arubia's Instructions

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This is a very short poem that tells one of my main characters(very cryptically) how to defeat the villan and rid the world of evil! Feedback would be lovely. You can read the introduction of my character in chapter 1 of Chronicals of the Orderen; posted in my portfolio. :D

In Light and Life and Darkness bound

return Him to his prison sound.

The Names of power She must bring

to spur the gods' awakening!
"...I have conclusively determined that you are not Hamlet, Scout Finch, Frankenstine's monster, Ms. Marple, or a golum. Aren't you relieved to know you're not a golum?"~Dustin Hoffman




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It can't exactly stand alone, but it's good in structure, rhythm, and flow. =]




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Thanks! I was thinking of expanding it for the story
"...I have conclusively determined that you are not Hamlet, Scout Finch, Frankenstine's monster, Ms. Marple, or a golum. Aren't you relieved to know you're not a golum?"~Dustin Hoffman



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