Time

Paper below me
Pen in hand.
One question left
what do I do?

Tick tock tick tock
times almost up.
I bite my lip
I start to shake.

Pens down she says,
I went on a whim.
Will it pull off
or am I wrong.

Test scores back
I did well.
Even for that answer
I couldn't tell.

I liked it a lot! I've found myself in that gruesome situation many a time! I liked the rhythm very much, and felt the pressure of time slipping away. I do wonder, though, about just a few things.

In your line, 'I start to shack' did you mean to say 'shake'? And in the line,
'Will it pull OF,' Did you mean 'pull OFF'?

In all, a very good piece. Bravo!

Goldie

It's good! You've really summed up how it feels. You might want to check it over though - what's 'shack' supposed to mean?
Like it anyway - Bkwrm

Hey!

commenting on ur work after a long time.

And as always I liked it....

thats a nice piece...

~Ani~

WOOHOO! High five man! *virtually high fives you* I've read many of your other poems and this one seems like the best one you've done so far! You have improved greatly! Keep writing!

God Bless,
wraithfound

Well this seems like a good poem....and obviously people here know how it is, and though this doesn't need to be repeated I'll do it anyway for kicks and giggles.



The poem is good. I Liked it. Very true!! Would you like fries with that?

Have a great day...

ANNABELLE