my hero

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MY HERO
I have a hero! He is special to me.
His name is daddy.
I remember when I couldn’t see daddy. Mummy said it was cause he was sad.
One day I saw daddy. He cried.
I told him not to because I still loved him.
He didn’t stop.
But I don’t understand daddy what makes you cry so?
I told you, I promised you I will not let you go!
Not again!
Mummy will let me stay I’m sure of it, she will.
If not ill kick and scream until I get ill.
I wont leave you alone.
Not in this lonely so called home.
Alone is not where you should be.
You should be forever with me.
I have a photograph of u and me
And it’s the only time you look happy.
Daddy did I do this, did I make you cry?
Am I the reason you want to die?
Can I change what’s wrong to right?
Or will I loose you again tonight?
Daddy I love you please don’t leave
Or we will both be alone
Daddy
Daddy, I love you
Please don’t go.




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I thought the poem didn't really seem to flow at the begining. Also I noticed some spelling errors, but all in all it was a wonderful poem and I hope you post more!

God Bles,
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I wonder if people felt the freedom in our culture to love louder, if they'd be quicker to say "I miss you" when the absence of someone is felt instead of just thinking it.
— soundofmind