1,2

1,2
skip a few
99,100
3,4
ther is more
99,100
5,6
get some sticks
99,100
7,8
you're going to be late
9,10
be a hen
99,100
11,12
get a nerve
99,100
13,14
get some more sheen
99,100

that is a long way of counting to 100!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

why won't anyone reply? it's good!

I think nobody's replying because your own sense of good is different from everyone else's... No offence.

You waited 21 minutes, just be patient! Please!

Anyway, I didn't really like it, it's not completely original, you just continue an old children's rhyme.


Gurby

Is that a joke?
no offence but if you seriously think that is good...
welli can't talk my writing is hardly professional

Right.

First off, this isn't original. Sorry. Also, you don't count to 100, you count to 100 several times, your rhymes are lame, and...

just....

WHY????

Sorry fishface, I don't really like it either, mostly because it's an embellished children's poem. Also, the lines have nothing to do with each other; they're just there to rhyme with whatever number came first.

As others have said, this isn't much of a serious poem. This is like a rip-off of third grade humor.

If you're concerned about getting critiques, you might try posting something serious, or at least not being annoying about it. The best way is to comment on other work.

i agree with cadmium, from what i see you have posted many little 'poems' and expect replies as soon as you post them, your new and need to get established here, and when you post serious work people will be more than happy to review it

I didn't like it. It just wasn't well-written in any way (not that my writing's any good)

If you sang it to your children when you're older, it could be good.

And I would wait a bit longer for comments

The YWS is not a place to post your "thrown together in 5 seconds and has no meaning at all--I just like it because it rhymes" poems. Here we give feedback on poems and writings for serious writers. Please be considerate of the time we are all wasting on things such as this.

Thank you.
WM

no offence but offence that could even be worse than my rubbish old ones

"COULD"!

try to be more serious.

I also agree with cadmium. This is not poetry. It's just a continued children's rhyme. Furthermore, it makes no sense whatsoever.