This seems very random to me, yet again. I see it as a simple example of how rhyming should not be done. You base your poem entirely around what word you are going to rhyme with next. It makes very little sense. The only lines that followed on from one another were -
"spiral stair
nearly there
push and shove"
Everything else was just pointless. I didn´t like it.
Well, the poem really doesn't have any continuity... really doesn't make sense to me. It's a decent poem, it is kind of entertaining and whimsical, but it needs some continuity and a common theme, rather than a bunch of random things that rhyme... Not even necessarily a common theme, but one line needs to have something in common with the next line thematically.
