Upon A Kiss

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I was watching a t.v show and someone said "would you take my breath,
if upon a kiss' and this is what I made out of it
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Would you take my hand
if I let you lead,
out to a field
of clover,
where ravens fly
to gift the sky ~
the dance of
wing-ed lovers.

Would you take my breath
if upon a kiss,
these words of truth
were spoken;
an ancient tale
of fair thee well,
and promise left
unbroken.

Would you take my soul
with warmest touch,
without remorse
or sorrow,
til one we are
within the light ~
a memory of
tomorrow.
"Every-thing's broken there's no way around
It's so hard to smile
When you bring me down."
-
Me.




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Wow! That took my breath away--it was an amazing poem. You've obviously got talent.

Book_Worm_113 wrote: til one we are


It's till not til. Or, you could use 'til, which is short for until.

I'm sorry that I couldn't help you more!

McMourning
"One voice can be stronger than a thousand voices, " Captain Kathryn Janeway



Everything has to be taken on trust; truth is only that which is taken to be true. It's the currency of living. There may be nothing behind it, but it doesn't make any difference so long as it is honoured. One acts on assumptions. What do you assume?
— Player (Rosencrantz & Guildenstern Are Dead by Tom Stoppard)