Conked Out

Not sure what the poem is about but the words and lines of it are very good. Only one spelling correction I see that should be made. I'd give it a 8/10

I liked this but one thing did catch my eye and it kind of ruined the rest of it for me: you said [this enthusiasm] in the third line, What enthusiasm?
In the first two lines I got no impression that there was any enthusiasm, in fact more of a vibe of struggling with desperation, of picking up the pieces and trying to get back on track.
Despite this I think that I got what you were trying to say; that your struggling protagonist keeps getting shoved down by the antagonist. IMO you poem would be a thousand times better and more powerfull if you either back up the word enthusiasm or if you replace it with something more appropriate.

Hope this helps, other than the above mentioned I really got a sense of emotion coming to me through your words, that doesn't usually work quite so well with short pieces but with yours it did, which was great!
-Gen

Its actually because I wrote [I'll try to make my life worthwhile, you'll dampen this enthousiasim by pouring sarcasm all over the place]
it's basically saying that I'm getting enthousiasm trying to make my life worthwhile, and then it all goes boom.

Hmmm... I'm starting to see it now.
guess I misunderstood, anyways I still really like the poem, way better than I myself could ever do... poetry is not my forte to say the least.

Thanks for clearing that up!
-Gen