Lol, the ending kinda caught me off gaurd there. All of a sudden, you're talking about your hair, lol. I loved this one, you know I always love our poetry, Brad. One thing, though. in the first stanza, the part that says 'in the hands of boys in books long forgotten', two 'ins' sound a bit odd. Other than that, I really did enjoy this one. :thumb:
"You can go a long way with a smile. You can go a lot farther with a smile and a gun." -Al Capone
Hmm. This wasn't one of your best. Even though I know you hate sentences like that *smiles*
Especially the "were you" stanza, that didn't do it for me. Seemed so out of place...this was probably your intention, however, I don't think this is needed as the next few stanzas after this provide that purpose. Generally, the poem was fresh, I liked the enjambement style of ending with "are", "is" and "in" forcing you to read to the next line and letting it flow well. However, the end ruined it for me, and although this wans't your best,I still know you are an excellent writer and look forward to your next 'installment' (you're a regular comic book now).
