The Girl

It was the night of stormy seas where our treachery begun.

Seven men afloat with nothing left

No matter how hard we struggled, no matter how hard we tried

Mother Nature could not withdraw her callings

And soon we left at three

Suddenly in the midst of mayhem

I spotted a vision like no other

A girl dressed in angelic white

Gestured towards me

She extended her thin arms and held out my palm

Blowing into it a warm breeze

Then she looked into my eyes

And smiled once more

Then she kissed me as light as a feather

And suddenly I found myself washed ashore

With the other men dead

As my life was saved once more

This was very nice. I like how you separated your lines. It made this look very clean and as far as I saw there were no errors. Great job on imagery, I could really feel your words and I notice that you often tell a story in your poems. Nice style.

Keep at it!
~Rieda

You use a full-stop in the first line then use none for the rest of the poem. I would choose one way or another.

I enjoyed this very much, you write very nicely, with a fluent style, your piece is original. I would think better of it if you introduced a rhyme scheme, there are already elements of one but there is no definite structure. Very good.