1. I wouldn't title a magazine article "Rambling on ..."
2. I can't say I agree with you, but that's not a writing issue. However, I think you can find better ways to back up your opinion; more examples, and so on.
I mean, there is no way to distinguish "true" from "false" without evidence, right? If it's true, there is evidene for it. If it's not true, there's no evidence for it.
3. Your conclusion is ... awful. I really, really can't stand it. It's really pointless. You need to ask yourself "so what?" What should the reader think or do after reading your article?
Your conclusion should be concise and have an impact. I think you could work something in with the religion dealie, although that leaves out people who are agnostic/atheists.
Find a new word for "streamists." Unless you're Shakespeare or something, making up words usually doesn't go over well, especially in high school.
I think that was when I began to realize that reputation isn't everything. I should focus less about how others perceive me and more about what makes me happy. Because, in the end, I have to live with myself. — Seraphina
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