Pathetic and helpless
and don't you forget
that your silences speaks centuries
and your words speak regret.
Generally, this was good, but I feel the word 'centuries' might extend the third line a little too much. However I am bereft of any suggestions of how to replace it, so it would do little to harm the poem by keeping it there. I'm a bit scared of changing anything in this poem, as it might disrupt the original beat that I loved.
