The Blade of Power

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A weapon,
like no other,
formed from my soul.
It speaks of who I am,
but should not be used lightly.
It admits from your soul,
showing your true colors.
Be true to yourself,
and the blade of power is yours.

Inspired from a second book idea. Hope you like it.
Last edited by piepiemann22 on Sat Dec 30, 2006 4:39 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Cool Cool Cool Cool!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Love this poem!!!!
What are you writing a book about?
I always start novels but nver finish them.
Bets bit in this poem was
"A weapon,
like no other,
has been formed from my soul. "
I was going to say poetry in motion
but this is poetry so...
bye
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great poem it speaks and totaly has a voice of its own
i especilay like these oppening five lines
"A weapon,
like no other,
has been formed from my soul.
It speaks of who I am,
but a blade should not be used lightly."
they have tone and thats realy cool.
i think the poem has a deeper meaning beyond what the words seem to say. and that is we can be our own power and we can also destroy ourself and that deep insides we are powerfull and strong and if we do the right things we can unlesh this power.
"i lost a little time, now i'm a little lost"
"i did not make the world i'm just trying to live in it"




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I like it. it's short, only a few lines, but it still makes you think. i like poems like that. It has a real meaning, behind the few words and letters.
Give me time, i'll crit your work XD I promise.
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A weapon,
like no other,
has been formed from my soul.


The last line here seems cluttered. It may be better as
-formed from my soul

It speaks of who I am,
but a blade should not be used lightly.


Again here the last line in the quote is a little cluttered, maybe you could shorten it?

It admits from your soul,
showing your true colors.
Be true to yourself,
and the blade of power is yours.


nice ending to a nice poem, well done.
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Wow, well, I did have something to say, but Phorcys pretty much just said it, so I guess I'll have to be one of the people who clap you on the back and say, "That was pretty good!"




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Nice poem, would like to read the book ^^



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