The Full Spectrum

The Full Spectrum

Full spectrum all are we.
We willful come to thee.
The Knights of Night,
We come to fight.
Our dance of dissonance
Forewarns with resonance,
For threat of life
Comes of our strife.
And thou shall not win,
Nor enter in, for
We willful come to thee.
Full spectrum all are we.


Alrighty... now, I think this is my final. I like it. Now it's supposed to be a song, though I have no tune for it. Heh... so if anyone is willing to offer some skills in putting words to song, it'd be greatly appreciated! Any fixes or suggestions are still welcomed!
~The recently dubbed Yoyo

I liked how is started and ended on the same line. My only suggestion is add some more punctuation, I'm big on punctuation in poetry because otherwise I don't know how to read it! But thats just me. It reads pretty...and thats always good, right?

I agree - some punctuation other than those two commas would really help.
It sounds nice - the meter, rhythm, and rhyme are all fine, and, as Claudette said, it reads pretty. I just...didn't know what it was about. The statements were rather general or cryptic. I like it when I know what a poem is talking about. This one was a little to abstract for my taste. It did have some neat phrases, though..."Full spectrum all are we"...I really liked that, especially the way it was switched with its rhyming phrase at the end when they were repeated. Not only did it end the poem well, it sort of folded it like a taco.

Colleen

Pretty is good! ^_^ Thank you. I'll put some punctuation in.

cadmium wrote:I just...didn't know what it was about.

Eh. I have to say I second this! lol. Though I didn't admit it at first.

Hehee. That's funny Claudette.

This is pretty, but, what is it? Can you tell me?

Yeah, it's meant to be sort of cryptic. Part of the story. Everything isn't discovered yet, so that's the next part of the advanture for my characters. But alas, it must now wait for NaNo '07. Thanks though guys!

~Yoha