Like the Wind

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Here's one of my newer poems, hope you enjoy!

Like the wind I wander
Into a darkened yonder
Like the wind I cry
Into a deep dark sky
Like the wind I travel
My tale of woe unravels


Like the wind I fly
I will not ever die
Like the wind I howl
My face frozen in a scowl
Like the wind I inquire
Is there a being higher

Like the wind I wander
Into a darkened yonder
Like a wind I wander
Into a darkened yonder
Like a wind I cry
My own undoing I deny




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I enjoyed it!

that was a short and nice poem.

Like the wind I fly
I will not ever die
Like the wind I howl
My face frozen in a scowl
Like the wind I inquire
Is there a being higher


i felt the last two lines to be a bit confusing.

Keep writing :)
"A good plot is like a dream.If you dont write down your dream on paper the moment you wake up,the chances are you'll forget it and it'll be gone forever"-Roald Dalh.




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yeah, my favorite stanza is the first one. . .
Like a wind I wander
Into a darkened yonder
Like a wind I cry
My own undoing I deny




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hmm..no doubt u have put it in ur siggy,it is good.
"A good plot is like a dream.If you dont write down your dream on paper the moment you wake up,the chances are you'll forget it and it'll be gone forever"-Roald Dalh.




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yep. . . i was kinda depressed and put it on my school binder. . .
Like a wind I wander
Into a darkened yonder
Like a wind I cry
My own undoing I deny




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A nice poem. The rhyming wasn't forced and i really liked this, very effective on the reader
Real poetry are those with the best words in the best order

~~~~~~~~Mandy~~~~~~~~~




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A little angsty, but I like it. It had a very lost, mournful tone. I like the repetition and the wind simile.
"I myself am composed entirely of flaws, stitched together with good intentions."- Augusten Burroughs



Sometimes my life just sounds like surrealistic fiction being sold on clearance at the book store.
— J. G. Hammersmith