Tree Dance

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Tree Dance

On a cloudy day
When the wind blows
The trees begin to dance

Branches bend
Trunks sway
And the leaves spin and twirl
Before being ripped away

They dance together
In the forest below
The sun peeks out
Setting leaves aglow

Church bells ring
To announce the time
This Saturday noon
In autumn’s middle prime

And the trees begin to dance
When the wind blows
On a cloudy day


Inspired by a recent, beautiful autumn day. ^_^
Last edited by yoha_ahoy on Thu Nov 09, 2006 11:20 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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There are no comments? A travesty!

I'm surprised that no one's said anything, Yoha, this is quite good. I can see the beautiful day and I think you captured all the imagery wonderfully.

Good job! ^_^




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he's right, actually. very good. it's hard to find something wrong with it! haha.

great job.
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Wonderful! I defenetly get the picture
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The trees begins to dance


begins = begin

That's all. Nice poem and you didn't seem to add colours of autumn as other poets tend to do.
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Typo fixed. Thank you Myth and Krystal! :)
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It reads aloud well. I like the description in the second stanza. I was disappointed by the last stanza. I would have kept it more alive. -London




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The poem looks simple, but your use of imagery creates a meaningful poem. Good job!
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