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[url][user][/user][/url] So I'm writing a book where right now the protagonist has a concussion and cannot focus very well, so when the other character asks them a question their speech is slurred and sluggish, so I kinda need help trying to write them speaking as if they're about to fall unconscious or as if they've been drugged. Any suggestions?




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I do actually, if its not too much of a bother




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Slurred speech can be formed with sh taking the s position, so that it seems realistic. Maybe add a Ellipsis to give a stop. Also add some in story detail.

Ex. She felt her eyes drag as she tried to stand. The room around her was shaking and she let out a mumble, "Where am I?.. I though I was s-safe."

I hope I helped. :)
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