Catherine~ A Mystery Set During the French Revolution

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darksleuth64
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Fri Oct 27, 2006 8:20 pm
darksleuth64 says... · Fri Oct 27, 2006 8:20 pm
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Fri Oct 27, 2006 8:22 pm
Firestarter says... · Fri Oct 27, 2006 8:22 pm
*moved to Historical Fiction*
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Mon Oct 30, 2006 10:32 pm
Poor Imp says... · Mon Oct 30, 2006 10:32 pm
Hullo Darksleuth. Spacing--though not a difficulty in printed books--makes rather more difference on the forums.

It's almost impossible to read all that text bunched together. Space it out, double?

It had a dramatically bleak beginning, and I liked the use of short sentences in between to pace. I'll be back to look over it if you'll do me the favour of making it more legible. ^_^


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