Poem Deleted

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Swottielottie
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Sun Oct 22, 2006 2:26 pm
Swottielottie says... · Sun Oct 22, 2006 2:26 pm
i am deleting this rubbish poem *PING* gone yay!
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Incandescence
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Sun Oct 22, 2006 5:12 pm
Incandescence says... · Sun Oct 22, 2006 5:12 pm
Swottielottie,


Did you pull this from Grey's Anatomy (the text, obviously)?

Besides lacking all elements of poetry, it is generally bad. Poetry is more than a collection of linebreaks.

Try again.


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Brad
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Swottielottie
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Sun Oct 22, 2006 5:25 pm
Swottielottie says... · Sun Oct 22, 2006 5:25 pm
No I did not get it from gray's anatomy
I wrote it myself
What are the elements of poetry anyway?
because i have never been taught anything about that
Sorry if it was not to your liking
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xanthan gum
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Sun Oct 22, 2006 5:46 pm
xanthan gum says... · Sun Oct 22, 2006 5:46 pm
I'm not sure about the elements of poetry, but I know that it lacked a meaning...besides that of the circulatory system (which isn't all that moving) and...it had no symbolism, imagery, nothing really to spice up this poem that already lacks something profound.
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ConorR
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Sun Oct 22, 2006 5:50 pm
ConorR says... · Sun Oct 22, 2006 5:50 pm
hello it is me i kinda like this poem but i have to agree with GUMMYFACE

yours strangley
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