"Dry Hump"

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"Dry Hump"
-SlickJimmy

To say hello was a novel cadence
To embrace hands expectedly tense
-Those feelings became proper.

Topical coffee gave way to our smarts
And steered the course for median hearts
-Those feeling began to prosper.

Each learned the other, no secrets at all
When we held tight, we’d soar and not fall
-Those ideas are quite a foundation.

A comforting hug led a nervous peck,
A bite of the lip led whisper to neck,
-Those ideas are quite a sensation.

Young potential was there to be raided
Raided they were by me unabated.
-Those thoughts were rescinded with caress.

I tried to make right, your offended fragility
By writing some words of profound ability
-But the thoughts are trapped by distress.
Last edited by deleted on Wed Oct 04, 2006 11:50 pm, edited 3 times in total.




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I made some changes to this piece, and declare that is is no longer a poem but an exercise in creative writing. Critique away.



Il faut imaginer Sisyphe heureux (One must imagine Sisyphus happy).
— Albert Camus, The Myth of Sisyphus