Hidden Truths, Brazen Lies

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ajruby12
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Fri Aug 25, 2017 12:30 am
ajruby12 says... · Fri Aug 25, 2017 12:30 am
Hey guys! I've been posting this novel in the forum, but here's the full version, if any of you are interested in reading it. Any comments or edits are appreciated.

https://drive.google.com/open?id=1X64lw ... 3CF3A5CCsw
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Fri Aug 25, 2017 8:02 pm
Lumi says... · Fri Aug 25, 2017 8:02 pm
Yo, AJ!

I'll definitely try to look over this and give you some overarching comments on theme and characterization (as those are my main critiques with novels, I feel.) That said, I wanna give a little nod to those who want to click the link and make sure you guys use fake names on Google! We want you to stay as safe as possible! :)
I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
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Sat Aug 26, 2017 1:53 am
ajruby12 says... · Sat Aug 26, 2017 1:53 am
Ha, oops. I copy and pasted the novel from a formated copy.

But I would really appreciate any comments that you can give! I'm a novel newbie, so I'm still working on the art of writing in that context. :)
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