Sonnets Don't Work for Me...

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Whilst sitting under a tree
In the dark of a night
After a thinking spree

I regrettably tried to
Write a sonnet
But since I had
A bee in my bonnet
It didn’t quite work out
Much to my dismay
So I began to pout

What troubles you?
So they all did ask,
Seeing my face
Turning blue
As I hissed and fumed
My very state did scare
A rather weary moon

Once more I failed to
See upon the wall
A genius token tale
Of yonder and of yore
Upon a varied vale

But I regret that quickly
I must go as you
Begin to yawn, or I will
Not be back again
Alas that would be scorned


...:roll: ???
Last edited by Boni_Bee on Mon Apr 24, 2006 7:43 am, edited 1 time in total.




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Aww... it was cute... but

Sonnets: 14 lines of rhymed iambic pentameter
1 line consists of 5 iambs
1 iamb equals 2 syllables
And you can add a syllable or two to a line if it's nessesary

I wrote a poem for xanthan gum, which consists of these, if not a sonnet.

I liked this... but the lines were too short to be a sonnet anyway :P
I think you were attempting one... right? I mean... bee in my bonnet? :P Yeah, that's a sonnet.

Alas, Boni Bee, I must bid adieu
So after I sleep and after I rest
I shall return tomorrow anew
Don't get your hopes down, just still try your best




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quite funny :D

The second stanza especially flows well, and the 'bee in the bonnet' bit fits the author quite well :lol:




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Thanks... :) It wasn't meant to be a sonnet, because it wouldn't work! lol It is just a silly rhyming poem...lol




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Nice-very nice. The short and rhythmical lines are fabulous!!
I really liked this: “As I hissed and fumed
My very state did scare
A rather weary moon”
In the line “I regretably tried to” regrettably is spelt without a‘t’.
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Thanks Sohini! :D I fixed that up...




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I liked this! I have no clue what a sonnet is, but it was a wonderful poem all the same! I agree with Elizabeth. :D
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