Lens

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LENS

My life revolves around Rod Stewart
and his hopeless optimism,
cascading over my cut strings
and broken back as I lie in bed
next to this week's dream, this week's peace,
this week's light and hope of rebirth.
I wish my computer was a typewriter
just so it didn't play music
and print pictures of people
who refuse to exist even if they want to -
and they do.

My brother hanged himself with a speaker cable
on the last day of June, the demon sun
holding his hands for the first time in months;
when we emptied his room we found pictures
of the three of us shopping for cameras,
photographs-turned-aeroplanes floating gently
over our heads to someone else.

Home is where the art is,
and we sail inspiration's stormy sea
to be with you; to be free.
The Oneday Cafe
though we do not speak, we are by no means silent.




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First of all, kudos to you. This was one of the best poems I've ever read. *applauds* It was touching, moving, simple, heartfelt, deep. Only one change I would make:

[quote]who refuse to exist even if they want to - [/quote[

I would do a line break between exist/even. I just think it would add more to the drama. Just a suggestion though! Again, fantastico job!

Wiggy ;)
"I will have to tell you, you have bewitched me body and soul..." --Mr. Darcy, P & P, 2005 movie
"You pierce my soul." --Cpt. Frederick Wentworth

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You unlock this door with the key of imagination. Beyond it is another dimension: a dimension of sound, a dimension of sight, a dimension of mind. You’re moving into a land of both shadow and substance, of things and ideas. You’ve just crossed over into… the Twilight Zone.
— Rod Serling