The Ghost of Kilburne Heights

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The Ghost of Kilburne Heights
Morgan Harper
April 15, 2006

Verse One
ghosts don't really talk
they've got nothing to say
ghosts walk very slow
so to find their way
to our beds so they can watch us

with their cold, lonely stares
and they're wanting so bad
what's sleeping right there

Chorus
but the ghosts of Kilburne Heights
are real and live real lives
and real ghosts don't let you know
that they're ghosts trapped inside human souls

real ghosts don't want to know
that they're just ghosts on the coast
of where they died failed to realize
that they're the ghosts of Kilburne Heights and
I wish someone had known them while they were alive

Verse Two
ghosts don't really feel
they've got nothing to hold
ghosts don't like to haunt
they've got no one to follow
besides us with our beating hearts
they wish they had once again
and they're wanting so bad
to fill their hollow skin

Bridge
I know these ghosts too well
because I can always tell
what's shaking behind their walls
because it's never anything at all
and I can always tell
I know these ghosts too well
I know what no one knows
perhaps I'm one of these ghosts
perhaps we're all ghosts

Outro
I'm a ghost of Kilburne Heights
I'm real, I live a real life
and I'll never let you know
that I'm really a ghost trapped inside a human soul
and now I've come to know
that I'm just ghost on the coast
of where I died failed to realize
that I'm just another ghost of Kilburne Heights and

I wish someone had known me while I was alive
the ghosts of Kilburne Heights
the ghosts of Kilburne Heights
the ghosts of
the ghosts of everything
the ghosts of life
when there's nowhere to go, it's time to grow up.




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Overall I liked this. The first verse seemed a little chopppy though. Did you mean to break the stanzas when you did, because that looks a little weird.

"so to find their way
to our beds so they can watch us"

I think the "to's" and "so's" are too close together. Maybe "Finding their way to our beds so they can watch us" or something like that.

Overall, good job. :thumb:
"You do ill if you praise, but worse if you censure, what you do not understand." Leonardo Da Vinci

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Hey thanks Niteowl..
Side note: Wow! I didn't know you were 16! when did this happen?

I didn't mean to seperate the first verse like that. I guess I accidentally pressed the Enter key. Also, "Finding their way to our beds so they can watch us" does sound better..I'm going to change it when I get on the computer that will allow me to do it.

Thanks again.
when there's nowhere to go, it's time to grow up.



Anxiety is the dizziness of freedom.
— Søren Kierkegaard