This fits the rhyme pattern, it's a beautiful image and you displayed it beautifully. I don't favor haikus, but this one was constructed properly - so good job.
Pretty good considering all hope has died for me and haikus. I read one... several yesterday that tore my soul apart and made me cry. Nice job on these ones though.
I loved it. I suppose it wasn't a master piece among haikus, but I really really liked it. Very well written. I know this is going to sound just a tiny bit weird, but the first thing that came to mind when I read this was Tibet (with all the mountains and what-not).
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