Dreams

I see in your heart, the dreams that you wanna achieve
Open the doors let me into your blood stream,
And let me flow 'round you baby,
we all need somebody to love them,

So don't shut me out,
Don't cry and shout,
'Cos I'm here for you Baby whenever.

It's annoying seeing that title of IT'S NOT GOOD READ ANYWAY because it doesn't want to be read then.

You can leave little messages before or after the poem, not as the title.


dream's should be only dreams (I think)
round is either 'round or around, not round... that makes me think of a fat baby....

Yeah, Yeah. What the ....??

This... made my eyes burn out... I'm sorry.... What was this? I .... what? (O_O)
This seemed like the chorus to some boy band song, and they stink!

re-write it, expand it, make it better.
Get a title

Again, frankly- either make it rhyme perfectly, or don't. The choice is yours. But if you wish to have rhyme, it really must be perfect. I.E. Stream and Achieve do not rhyme. I would also suggest that you take a little more time formatting your posts and do a little research on how to format lyrics or poetry. First lines are generally capitalized, and an end to a statement is suggested by a period(.) I really don't mean to be rude; it's just common courtesy to make sure you've generally formatted your work- that way we all can give you good critiques without added distraction.

Also, I feel the need to point out that "reply" is misspelled in your signature line.

Thanks for listening.