Toe's Sock of Poems!

Yes! This is the first time I'd participate in anything YWS offered me. I know you guys have been wondering why I've been shying away from these activities, because I haven't! I've just been really pressured by Medical school, projects and presentations lately. Without family support things get alot tough.

Anyhow, I'm here to improve my skills in poetry. I don't plan on writing a poem everyday like most of you are doing. My goal is something like 5 to 10 until the end, less is more when it comes to quality! Thanks Rydia for that point and the inspiration.


#1 Sirens’ Song

“O, this way, turn your bows,”
We sung as one, daughters of Achelous.
“O, one day, fulfill our vows;”
Revenge be won, Hades the rebellious.

“Sea rovers here take joy;”
Until then, lone sailors be our prey,
“As from our song of Troy,”
Cursed men! Devoured ‘til doomsday.

Hi! So I'm thinking you could maybe change 'sea rovers here take joy' which would make altering that other line easier as well. I'm not sure why they're taking joy? Surely they should be afraid instead?

Other than that, I love the changes you've made - great work

Rydia wrote:Hi! So I'm thinking you could maybe change 'sea rovers here take joy' which would make altering that other line easier as well. I'm not sure why they're taking joy? Surely they should be afraid instead?

I forgot to tell you another point of the poem. The quoted parts is the actual song they sing to their lures and the unquoted is their thoughts about it.

Greek Myth FTW. Great work, toe.

Another challenge by Rydia. It wasn't supposed to turn into a mysterious Who Am I type of poem. But oh well, whoever guesses this right gets to pick the next topic of my poem.

#2 The Antique

Gold-edged, wood-drenched,
Cushioned velvet, sprinkled grey;
Royally made, but colors fade.
Sadly waits, for a stranger to pay.

Back straight, down on all fours,
Self-important, though under groins.
Craving creaks of flapping doors,
Awaiting freedom, bounce of coins.

This is wonderful and i personally wouldn't change anything because i think it's already perfect I love greek myths and the sirens are one of my favourite mythical characters. Well done!

Your talk of chairs is so full of images, my dear Toe and for that I give you your next topic: old books. FIRE!

First one has good rhythm. You have an ear for good meter and the rhymes are never too imposing. The ancient stuff is always fun, though I feel like I always have to go and look up some forgotten old name or something haha.

The second was more playful. Bouncing rhythm and intriguing imagery. I liked it better, I think of the two. The ending was the best part.