Feel Love

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"Feel Love"
By: Lisa (©LC Sounds)

Your eyes make my knees go weak
You always make my heart skip a beat
You make mee feel like a geek
And I love that
I don't care if you couldn't speak

Chorus:
'Cause all I want is to feel love
I want to know how to live
I want to learn how to forgive
I really want to know what love is
Because I won't be able to relive
Relive this moment in time
So all I want is to feel love

You took my hand
And said I was just a good friend
I couldn't understand
I thought you felt the same way
I felt like I was sinking in sand
I felt like I couldn't breathe

Chorus

I see my friends in love
I can't help but feel a little jealous
Because who would want to love me?
All I can do is agree
That they are perfect for each other
Just so no one would disagree with me
But what I really want I can't have

Chorus

So go ahead leave me alone
I don't want love
All because you broke my heart
I gave up on this thing called love
I gave up everthing I wanted

Chorus
Last edited by musicroxslife on Wed Mar 29, 2006 8:51 pm, edited 1 time in total.




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The first stanza was really cliche, but it got better after that. I liked the chorus.

And just saying I was a good friend


I think "And said I was just a good friend" would flow better.

I see my friends in love
I can't help but feel a little jealous
Because who would want to love me?
All I can do is agree
That they are perfect for each other
Just so no one would disagree with me
But what I really want I can't have


I liked this stanza. Overall, good job. Keep writing! :thumb:
"You do ill if you praise, but worse if you censure, what you do not understand." Leonardo Da Vinci

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