Angelic

arched across the gallows pole the writing of my name,
do not leave the ecstasy of what so long ago-

Listen

the pixies whisper words of warning

to whoever wanders near

turquoise flies and jagged edges

no

do not fear

let me stumble through the bramble of what memories
I cease to to see

Tyger, tyger

burning bright

in the forests of the night

There have been whispers

more then whispers

of my- treachery-
love-

death.

OK, what do you think?I changed the ending, I din't know if it's any better though.

i liked the incorporation of the poem "Tyger, tyger" - i am unsure who it is by, but I am certain I've read it before. The rhyme/rhythm in this section is considerable well handled:

Listen

the pixies whisper words of warning

to whoever wanders near

turquoise flies and jagged edges

no

do not fear

only one definite correction:

do not leave the Ecstasy of what so long ago-

ecstasy should be lowercased, no?

There have been whispers

more then whispers

of my-

end

i didn't really get this ending. all in all, the poem was beautiful and airy - almost ethereal - but the ending...ehh. i think it deserved better, but i'm not exactly sure how i can phrase it. sorry.

Darn spell cheaker when it spelled ecstasy for me it capitilized it. Yeah, I know it it desearves a better ending, I'll try to help that.

i'm unsure what to make of this poem
it's different...
theres a couple of spelling mistakes...maybe this is a new approach to poetry i dont know. i didnt catch the flow, but it seemed pretty good.