Dancing Inside A Raindrop

you know i was at a school dance that night? hmmm just saying...my date was horrible. =/

i loved your use of cutting out letters:

'nd
'n'

that made it flow better or sound more realistic or some thing like that.

and the "breakthru" being one word really annoys me, but since your PsyLynx, you might have done that for a reason...or because you do whatever you want to. either way, i'm just saying...it's weird. i want a space. i'm a space fanatic.

because I see an entire humanity enraptured by it

because you said "because" there, it's saying either of these:

"we're until this disco ball...because i see entire humanity enraptured by it."
OR
"because i see an entire humanity enraptured by it, there's a peace sign..."

neither of them make much sense, but if it's what you wanted...whatever.

this had a very sparkling, alive feeling and i loved the first line, the last stanza and everything inbetween. sorry for nitpicking or whatever, but i always feel the need to perfect a beautiful poem (however instubstantial my critiques might be.)

heh.
The 'because' is explaining why I'm saying all this.

I too was at a school dance that night. Stopped in the middle of it to stare at the disco ball and consider writing a poem about it, then ducked out from dancing to jot parts of this poem down.

Yeah, I'm a dork. That's right. And I'm also Psylynx.

( i like i like) this bit is good The world is moving fast, quaking like volcanic eruption mania disease the poem is excellant

it's an interesting poem...

"yet others sparkle,
‘n’ only one in a thousand, once a lifetime,
shimmer. "

That piece I found refreshing.

"because I see an entire humanity enraptured by it"

hehe. Classic example of passive writing...I would say: "because I see humanity enraptured."
good job.