Forgiveness

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Certainly Love
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Mon Feb 13, 2006 11:04 am
Certainly Love says... · Mon Feb 13, 2006 11:04 am
I hate him with a passion
Still with burning eyes
I look at him with passionate rage
And all I feel begins to subside
I took a step to forgive somehow
And love did the ultimate healing, now I am free
Sound and certain…that this rage
Will never arise…for this is the insurmountable me
Last edited by Certainly Love on Mon Mar 06, 2006 8:36 am, edited 1 time in total.
Sincerely, Amanda R. Holden, Author of Azyea's GIfts
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zell
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Mon Feb 13, 2006 12:39 pm
zell says... · Mon Feb 13, 2006 12:39 pm
8) wicked i like the bit where it says I look at him with humane rage thats cool
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xanthan gum
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Mon Feb 13, 2006 10:34 pm
xanthan gum says... · Mon Feb 13, 2006 10:34 pm
omit a "..."
the lines get longer as they go, but the rhythm didn't crash and burn. this has a definite point, it wasn't forced, and sounded very good. great job =] i only wish it could've been longer, but then, i suppose, length sometimes can kill the poem as well as make it, so i won't object.
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