An Endless Sensation

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I miss the eyes that gazed my way
The brown hazel hues of your eyes that penetrated into mine
Each time you were so close
In the moment that you whispered in my ear everso kind

I miss the lips that seized mine
The tender lips that caressed every part of my being
Each time we were one
In the moment that you gave love instead of receiving

I miss the hands that held mine
The hands that wandered in various places
Each time you were near
In the moment that you eliminated all past faces

In the end, I miss the yearnings
The pleasant sensations of what a single touch could bring
The passionate pleas of us both…wanting
And everything in between
Last edited by Certainly Love on Mon Feb 13, 2006 10:12 am, edited 1 time in total.
Sincerely, Amanda R. Holden, Author of Azyea's GIfts




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I miss the eyes that gazed my way
The brown hazel hues of your eyes that penetrated into mine
Each time you were so close
In the moment that you said the sweetest line


penetrated? it sounds awkward
"in the moment you said the sweetest line" - this doesn't work. it's random, striving for rhyme and doesn't specify much importance besides that if sweet talk, and you don't even say what it is.

I miss the lips that ceased mine
The tender lips that caressed every part of my being
Each time we were one
In the moment that you gave love instead of receiving


the lips...ceased you? huh? do you mean "seized"?
again, the last line appears awkward. i get the whole giving love right now thing, but i think you could use this space in the poem to express more valuable information.

I miss the hands that held mine
The hands that wandered in various places
Each time you were near
In the moment that you eliminated all past faces


it's the last line again. first of all, i don't believe you should have said "the" there. maybe "that" would've made more sense.

In the end, I miss the yearnings
The pleasant sensations of what a single touch could bring
The passionate pleas of us both…wanting
And everything in between


i loved this stanza! it was pratically perfect! i'm just suggesting changing the "..." (i think they're called the elipses of something) to a " - ". then again, i have a dash fetish.
inbetween, not in between.
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