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   RebeccaZeno Creator
   RebeccaZeno · Feb 21, 2013

   Here is where we all can share our characters!
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   RebeccaZeno Creator
   RebeccaZeno · Feb 21, 2013

   Ok, so this is for my no named book (35k):
   
   Kyra Maltron, a 16-year-old female witch(though she doesn't find out about being one until later) that has a lot to uncover in the new realm. She has brown-gold hair that reaches her elbows, a soft, pale face that reddens quickly from embarrassment. She was taken away from her family in the realm by Ti'Winders to the human world, and grew up as if she were She can be a bit spiteful at times, but she is mostly just a confused teenager living in a mixed realm. She has an average height of 5' 5". Kyra has a very sassy side to her when she gets stressed out or confused and can't help but explode at times. She is a risk-taker and doesn't plan ahead for things to happen, she rides the waves and can be careless.
   
   Aidan Sonton, the polite, sweet, proper knight in shining armor. He as a sharp jaw with a brief tan, deep blue eyes, and short(A few inches long), brown hair. At the age of 25 he is the sworn protector and knight for Kyra. He always thinks ahead of situations and calls people above him Ms. Mr. or Mrs. He grew up in the town as a knight in training then upgraded to the castle. Once there he was to protect the princess, Kyra, but she was taken at three months and he almost lost his job. His duties are to protect, and that is what he was born for. He doesn't like the risks and does not approve of Kyra's risks. He reaches the height of 5' 11".
   
   Mistlear Leah, the dark and twisted fairy queen, with long blond hair that reaches her tailbone. She grants the realm wishes, creating potions and magical necklaces, but in return, gets revenge. She fools the male wizards in the realm and then captures them as her own. If you lose or don't repay her for her gifts, she will punish you in the most evil ways possible, and enjoys it. She has a gown that is aqua blue and drags along the path she had stepped on, that is her best quality, which pulls most people into her trap. She is 172-years-old, but looks to be only in her young twenties. She isn't very serious, even if it's someone dying, she laughs, she's learned to look forward, and not behind her, the past was her worst years.
   
   The Queen(Or grandmother to Kyra), is 65-years-old and has a caring, nurturing personality. She has wrinkles caressing her face, and brown, dark eyes. Her slim body allows her to squeeze into any dress made. She always has her hair in a bun, where her golden, diamond-decor crown rests atop. She is a determined woman that likes to work hard and protect her kingdom, she believes giving up is like killing yourself, and she will never give up fighting for her kingdom.
   
   The Kind(Or grandfather to Kyra) is 70-years-old and has a strong addiction to eating. Any little issue that has been resolved must conclude in a feast. His big, round belly fits into a proper golden-yellow robe and white undershirt. A black and silver belt keeping it all up. His beard reaches his chest, white and grey curls fall from his chin. He has a golden brown eye color and wrinkled face as well. Though he cares about his kingdom, his weight has held him back from fighting for his kingdom. He gets a regular 'beating' from his wife, the queen, when he acts up to be immature.
   
   If you have any critiques for ^^ Go ahead and shoot!

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