Young Writers Society

Requests, anyone? I'll review anything except graphic 18+ stories (not concerned about language, though) and poetry/lyrics.

Title: Advent Children; Death of a Major Player (Part1/2)
Link: (Below)
Genre: Action/Adventure Fiction
Points of Interest: Spelling, grammar, etc. The usual.
Current Parts/Chapters:

Part 1
Part 2

Thanks!

Done. Mostly nitpicks, but still done.

Hey Jetpack, whenever you have the time, I'd really appreciate it

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It's just the first 800 words of my novel, I'm pretty sure it could stand by itself in a short story. Be as nitpicky as you want! And thanks a lot.

Done, Audy! Hope it's helpful. There wasn't much to comment on in terms of plot and character, so I nitpicked away.

Hey Dude Whenever You Have Some Freetime I Could Do With A Review Mate:
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic53258.html
It's not that long btw.

Okays, it's all done! I'm a dudette, by the way. ^_^

Hi, my story's been up for a week but not getting much attention... not sure if I'm just being impatient or not, but would you mind reviewing it? It's fantasy, the first chapter of what might be a book. Whenever you have time, no rush.

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Hey. I would like to think I'm almost finished on this piece, but when you read your own writing you miss things . So just if you get the time please review

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic53253.html

Thanks.

Done and done. Any more?

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Thanks

I've finished, Zoorah. Sorry, it was kinda harsh, but hopefully you can appreciate my reasoning. I've tried to give you as much advice as possible.

Anyway, there's no queue, so anybody else?

Hey again Jetpack! I was wondering if you would mind doing one of your awesome reviews on

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic53600.html

It includes the same piece as before (You would remember it as The Absence of Wind, but I have renamed it Where Shadow Steps), with a few very minor changes so don't worry about doing that bit. (Which is now Chapter 1 not the prologue)So really just the new Prologue and Chapter 2.

If you don't have the time don't worry about it.

Thanks!

Finished! Awesome as always, Art.

Still looking for some reviews to get me motivated. I have more time than I thought, and half-term is coming up, so post here anytime. ^^

This is a shameless bump, and nothing more. Any requests?