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Sat Sep 19, 2009 3:36 pm
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Jetpack says...



Requests, anyone? I'll review anything except graphic 18+ stories (not concerned about language, though) and poetry/lyrics.
Last edited by Jetpack on Mon Jan 24, 2011 8:38 pm, edited 7 times in total.




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Sat Sep 19, 2009 7:15 pm
Xunnamius says...



Title: Advent Children; Death of a Major Player (Part1/2)
Link: (Below)
Genre: Action/Adventure Fiction
Points of Interest: Spelling, grammar, etc. The usual.
Current Parts/Chapters:

Thanks!
Out of English and into Programming!
This author is taking a break from his stories to create new ones in the world of C(#).

He'll be back. I promise!


What anime am I watching?




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Sun Sep 20, 2009 9:32 pm
Audy says...



Hey Jetpack, whenever you have the time, I'd really appreciate it :)

topic53106.html

It's just the first 800 words of my novel, I'm pretty sure it could stand by itself in a short story. Be as nitpicky as you want! :) And thanks a lot.




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Mon Sep 21, 2009 4:54 pm
Jetpack says...



Done, Audy! Hope it's helpful. There wasn't much to comment on in terms of plot and character, so I nitpicked away. :P




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Fri Sep 25, 2009 3:52 pm
rlw92 says...



Hey Dude Whenever You Have Some Freetime I Could Do With A Review Mate:
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic53258.html
It's not that long btw.




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Fri Sep 25, 2009 5:35 pm
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Jetpack says...



Okays, it's all done! I'm a dudette, by the way. ^_^




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Fri Sep 25, 2009 9:06 pm
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brassnbridle says...



Hi, my story's been up for a week but not getting much attention... not sure if I'm just being impatient or not, but would you mind reviewing it? It's fantasy, the first chapter of what might be a book. Whenever you have time, no rush.

topic53168.html
If there's a book you really want to read, but it hasn't been written yet, then you must write it.~Toni Morrison

It is written in m life-blood, such as that is, thick or thin; I can do no other~ Tolkien




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Sat Sep 26, 2009 2:17 am
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ArtOfSilence says...



Hey. I would like to think I'm almost finished on this piece, but when you read your own writing you miss things :) . So just if you get the time please review

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic53253.html

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Mon Sep 28, 2009 4:26 pm
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zoorah12 says...



topic53139.html

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I read somewhere... how important it is in life not necessarily to be strong... but to feel strong.




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Mon Sep 28, 2009 7:00 pm
Jetpack says...



I've finished, Zoorah. Sorry, it was kinda harsh, but hopefully you can appreciate my reasoning. I've tried to give you as much advice as possible.

Anyway, there's no queue, so anybody else?




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Sat Oct 10, 2009 12:54 am
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ArtOfSilence says...



Hey again Jetpack! I was wondering if you would mind doing one of your awesome reviews on

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic53600.html

It includes the same piece as before (You would remember it as The Absence of Wind, but I have renamed it Where Shadow Steps), with a few very minor changes so don't worry about doing that bit. (Which is now Chapter 1 not the prologue)So really just the new Prologue and Chapter 2.

If you don't have the time don't worry about it.

Thanks!




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Sat Oct 10, 2009 5:34 pm
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Jetpack says...



Finished! Awesome as always, Art. :)

Still looking for some reviews to get me motivated. I have more time than I thought, and half-term is coming up, so post here anytime. ^^




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Tue Oct 20, 2009 9:31 pm
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Jetpack says...



This is a shameless bump, and nothing more. Any requests? :D