It's the next part of Stop and Stare, as you may have guessed. There's a million and one typos in it due to lack of spell checker, so I hope you don't mind... x3
I just wrote this today....so its obviously a rough draft....I was wonder if you could critique it writing style...i know worded sentences awkwardly,find punctuation mistakes, grammar mistakes....what I really need to know is where i should expand...i dont confine with many restrictions but I want this chapter to be 5,000 words and im only on like 3,000 so i want to know where to expand or if i should add on other scenes ( i really dont want to). Even though i dont mention the main idea of the book i want to use this as an introduction. thanks a bunch P.S. its in word '03
Hai. In case you haven't guessed yet, it's Skins here. You may have guessed due to the aggression above, but I thought I'd make sure.
Would you mind reviewing the beginning of mine and Punk's novel? You are a God, therefore, your reviews are also Godworthy. We need you. Neeeeeed yooooou.
Anyway, I'm back. Mwhahahahahahahahaha. I love how I stalk your thread. Anyways, I'm a greedy child, so I'd really appreciate it if you could review the next part of Stop and Stare for me.
stelagineva: I'm sorry, but that's a bit too graphic for me. In general I don't want to review things rated 18+. Sorry to disappoint! I sent you a PM about it, so please feel free to PM me back if you want to discuss the matter. ^_^
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Hi Azila I was referred to you by a friend of mine on YWS, borntobeawriter? She's been following a novel of mine since the beginning and she said I need another pair of eyes to catch things. You come highly recommended as being "brilliant", so I'd love if you could take a look at it! I read on your first page that you don't do novels but I hope for me you may make an exception? My chapter's aren't that long and there are only nine of them.
If you do decide to check them out, below are the links to the first two chapters. It's under Historical Fiction and it's a story based around the Holocaust. No one seems to have shown any interest in it and it's slightly frustrating because it has taken up a good year of my life!
Thank you and if you choose not to do it then thanks for reading this ~day
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