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Would you take a look at an excerpt from a science fiction novel I'm working on? It isn't too long...(I hope), and it's in desperate need of some feedback.

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Thanks very much in advance.

Done with Bickazer's! Going on to Rascalover's soon.

Please review these:

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic36987.html This shouldn't be prologue

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic34323.html The mansion chapter 1

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic35415.html The mansion chapter 2

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic34985.html The ripper prologue


Please

Heylo!

Could you if you get the chance take a look at this for me:

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It's super short, its a small piece from a novel I am writing and it's just at the moment a real awkward piece of writing, any critique would be very much appreciated!

Thanks!

Meevs

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