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Mon Nov 03, 2008 11:15 pm
alwaysawriter says...



Nina screams in her ear so loud that she jumps back and pulls the phone away for a second.


She's holding the phone to her ear, not pushing the phone to her ear. Gah.

Yay for epic lameness; my novel already has way too much dialogue and has broken the "show, don't tell" rule many times. :(

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Mon Nov 03, 2008 11:40 pm
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LOL. These are all too good!

It was a true Victorian, only without the ugly pink paint and stuff.


Apparently all true Victorians have ugly pink paint and stuff...

“This is it,” my mom said, her tone giving off that 'ta-dah!' feel. She might as well have thrown her hands up and jazz handed.


I'll have you know that I had a very hard time wording that so it made sense... and it still doesn't! And I mean, really... jazz handed? xD

Another empty room and then we came to a room that was so big and long that I think I could’ve whispered “Ricola!” and it would've echoed.


Heh... xD
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Tue Nov 04, 2008 1:47 am
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My first thought was he’s perfect. He’s my rain fairy.

hehehe.

“But my nose will have frostbite by the end of the summer. That is so not right,” I muttered.


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Tue Nov 04, 2008 2:04 am
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She stared defiantly at him, her dark eyes cursing him to a painful eternity in god knows what kind of hell a whore could dream up.


Yeah... I couldn't be bothered thinking of what she would be imagining ><;

“Knife in boot. Cliché, I know, but even a doctor watches the occasional movie.”

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Woo non-editingness :p
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Tue Nov 04, 2008 4:42 am
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Considering it's the middle of March...

“I’m getting married!”
“To Ambroise?”
“Who else?”
“Really?”
“Really.”
“Wow!”
“Wow!”
“When?”
“We’re not sure – January some time, so not too far off.”


and

Alone, I peer out the window as Kaine leads his followers across the wild grass.


They're in a desert... but it fits so perfectly into what comes next, which is weirdly strange
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Tue Nov 04, 2008 9:53 pm
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Red walked quickly, his feet echoed as though he was wearing high heels, and when Lan looked down to find out it transpired that his boots did in fact have high heels. No wonder he’s so tall, Lan mused, and glanced around nervously into the dark little windows.

God how clumsy is that sentence? That is so not staying next month!
  





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Wed Nov 05, 2008 2:45 am
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Cain was a little creeped out as he entered the forest of retarded apple tree lollipops, but decided to keep moving.
“Shuuuuuun the unbeliever! Shuuuuuun!”


Yes. I have resorted to bad 'charlie the unicorn' references. Don't judge me ><;
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Wed Nov 05, 2008 2:51 am
Teague says...



"I think I agree with you."


Oh, the wisdom. It oozes from every drop of ink.

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Wed Nov 05, 2008 8:40 am
Insomnia says...



He humped from the bed.


Seriously? I mean, what? I meant to say jumped, if anyone thinks that that isn't a NaNoism. :P
  





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Wed Nov 05, 2008 11:32 am
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"She sat down on the end of her pallet, near Elias’ bed, and begn unpinning her hear, letting it fall in thick waves about her shoulders as she contemplated how to answer him."


Er, yes. Apparently, my FMC has thick, wavy "hear." Whatever that is...
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Wed Nov 05, 2008 12:11 pm
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Rain always seemed to dampen her spirits.


Still not sure if I'm trying to be ironic here...

edit to add:

He knocked on the door again, and heard a couple of locks let themselves go.


Again, Wartburg Track and Field? (Think about it... think about it... you got it).
  





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Wed Nov 05, 2008 1:18 pm
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. The Lady Alarise’s father was quite like his two daughters, with the same bright blue eyes that his oldest daughter Jera had, his youngest daughter Alarise and sister Rahel Burchard had.


This is bad, but it's kind of fun actually.
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Wed Nov 05, 2008 1:47 pm
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Or...

I turn away... and freeze. Two ice-blue eyes are staring at me.


Yeah, freeze, ice blue eyes...
  





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Thu Nov 06, 2008 4:10 am
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His relief was short lived, however. His sasuage was missing.


My sister saw that and gave me a 'wtf?' look. He's a thief. Nabbed a piece of sasauge off of someone.
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Man, if that’s the case, eternity is going to last forever

Obvious statement is obvious.

ohtasha. xD

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