Hey, this: topic73432.html is chapter 3 of a Sci-Fi novel I'm working on (it's not really classic Sci-Fi but oh well). If you could concentrate more on the character development aspect, I'd appreciate it.
Thanks in advance, ^^ |WaitingForLife|
(Oh, and feel free to check out the earlier chapters if it's confusing to just jump into the story mid-way )
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ok, so I know you said no more than five reviews or you wouldn't do it, but some of my later chapters of a novel I'm working on are getting very few reviews, so if you could read several of them that would be great. topic73681.html topic73742.html topic73817.html viewtopic.php?t=73924 thanks, ---Psudiname
if anyone wants a review, post on my profile and I'll get to it in a couple days.
Okay... I know it's got, like, 20 reviews already... literally, but I want your opinion on it. You're a fellow British person... Your opinion is special. I've also edited the piece since my last review, so I'd appreciate a new opinion on it.
Done Done Done! I felt like saying that because it sounds like: Dun Dun Dun! All scary a eerie like. Anyways, which other fabulous people would like a review?
Someone told me there's a girl out there, with love in her eyes and flowers, in her hair.
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I've also edited the piece since my last review, so I'd appreciate a new opinion on it.
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