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Fri Apr 04, 2008 3:46 am
PenguinAttack says...



My petals of infinite petalness!

I'm here today to wring you a bargain like never before! (disclaimer; bargain may have, indeed, been presented before) I am offering critiques, reviews, comments, my love spead across the toast of the literary - and imaginary arts!

It's quite amazing, really.

This one-time-only-but-maybe-for-a-while offer is only for poetry at the moment. Any kind of poetry. If I really, really love you, or am not terribly busy, I will review some other works, but you'll have to understand poetry take priority.

AT THE MOMENT NO NOVELS/SHORT STORIES OR NON-FIC.

If you want something in particular - grammar, imagery, metaphors, the second son of the third Roman line - looked at, tell me when you post the link. The more info I get on what you need, the more helpful I can be.

So. Come one, come all. Love me in literacy.

Also...

You taste like review.

Let's find out what kind.


*Hearts* Le Penguin.
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Mon Apr 07, 2008 8:57 am
chocoholic says...



I don't know if you do lyrics (you didn't speciffy). I'd love it if you could take a look at this song I wrote. I don't really care what you say. If you don't really do lyrics, you don't have to crit it, but I'd really appreciate it.

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Ta!
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Wed Apr 23, 2008 3:26 am
JFW1415 says...



[s]http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28900.html

Revised version of He's Just Human. Three parts. Due soon. I'm desperate.

Please?

Thanks so much!

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It's passed in, and now I'm going to actually spend time fixing it up. :wink:
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Sat Apr 26, 2008 3:07 pm
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A Fool's Hope

If you could do each chapter so far, that would be swell. If not, then just the last one, please. ^_^
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Mon Apr 28, 2008 1:24 pm
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Apologies, Jf, give me a holler any time you want me to look at it again.

Woooooooster. ^^ I'll print it out, if that's okay and start it tomorrow nice and proper, all chapters.

I should be done within the week - Sunday at the latest.

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Mon Apr 28, 2008 2:47 pm
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PenguinAttack wrote:Apologies, Jf, give me a holler any time you want me to look at it again.


No problem. :wink: I just asked a million people, figuring someone would look it over, and they did. Now that I have more time, I can really edit for content, not just the line-by-line stuff. I may come back once that's done. :lol:

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Sat May 03, 2008 3:33 am
Emerson says...



Oh, I love you terribly!

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I do want specific comments. I fear I fail at poetry entirely, and people may be lying to me about my qualities. How is my diction, my flow, my voice? Can you pick apart my ideas and does it make you think or feel? Is it a good poem, a deserving-of-life poem? Heheh. Oh, and does the title make sense? I fear the title is confusing.



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Mon May 05, 2008 8:36 pm
Matt Bellamy says...



Crit me please! :) topic29783.html
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Tue May 06, 2008 12:20 am
BigBadBear says...



Hey Penguin! Cause you're so flibberygibbery awesome, thought I'd drop bye.

I could use some help with this: topic29788.html
Just write -- the rest of life will follow.

Would love help on this.




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Sun May 11, 2008 2:05 pm
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Twitter, Zeus,

Your crits are done.

Matt, Boy,

Your crits will be done as soon as I can. ^^

Apologies for the wait.

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Wed May 21, 2008 2:46 am
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Penguin Darling!

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Pretty Please and Thank You!
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Wed May 21, 2008 1:46 pm
LoveableLittleSock says...



Hola, Penguino. I would be terribly ecstatic if you would take time out of your busy life and reviewed my piece for me. I don't believe I want anything looked at. Just, don't say it doesn't look like it's not going anywhere, seeing how it's fairly short and the first part of something.. so yeah.

I'll love you forever! And be harsh! I want my protaganist begging for her life by the end your done. Tear it apart... Anyhow, it's called "You're on in Five."

Here's the link: topic30428.html

Thanks a billion!
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Sun Jun 01, 2008 5:56 pm
Derek says...



Review me or face the horrid side effects of the nasty T-Virus i have injected into your skin O_O
You must review me to get the antidote ^^
Good Luck!

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Wed Jun 04, 2008 2:52 pm
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You're all up and completed, kids. ^^ Hope the reviews were suitable.

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Thu Jun 12, 2008 1:23 am
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If you please, Pengu. ^^

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