I posted it the other day and never got any feedback from anyone, which always makes me a bit... insecure. Especially when I so rarely write prose. Anyways, any CC would be appreciated. I know it needs work, I'm just trying to figure out how to do it.
No this isn't chapter eight, I won't be finished with that until this weekend but I'd love if you looked over this short story I threw together. Hope to hear from you soon my favorite reviewer! Thank you. ~day
Hi, I was hoping to request a review on the first part of my novel - post805208.html#p805208
it's general fiction. There's nothing explicit in it, although it has a medical aspect so it may be a bit gory - Part One has nothing at all, though, so no worries. And you can be as harsh as you'd like, I love harsh critiques.
(Just a note- this is a POV completely from the main character's point. She does have 'flashbacks' throughout the story [which I'm trying to place correctly] that explain a few of the details I left out purposefully.)
Thanks again!
Taylor
~formerly Ilovebubbles123
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Chapter 8 is up! I really struggled with this chapter for some reason, maybe it was because a major event is coming up in the story and I can't wait to start writing it......I don't know. I don't dislike this chapter but I just wasn't feeling it....could you let me know what YOU think? Thanks in advance! ~day
P.S. I know the description's a lot, and from the next parts I'll post the minimum so you guys don't have to read much. But if you find the fine, just tell, otherwise I know the problem with them.
*hug* Thanks, Shrubbery
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