Young Writers Society

Hello, fellow poet! Let's dive in!

Ah, gosh. This is such a sad piece in a really touching way. I liked this line here:

only here

because i'm still

incomplete.

faded

drove mad

from people

in the past

driven mad

from people

in the past

To be honest, if your goal was to rhyme like the last line, you did a bad job this time but it's fine it's not like it's a crime the rhyming isn't sublime but it's probably better than mine

Other than that useless nonsense I just HAD to spout, it's well put. You might feel incomplete as people go and take a piece of you with them, but that's what friends who will actually stick with you are for. If your heart was a stuffed animal, and people cut it open and hurt it, they would reach in and grab a handful of cotton when they leave. But think about it, what do they do with that cotton? They can't do anything else but fill someone else's heart. I'm sure you'll find someone who will stay and place a handful of cotton back in your incomplete heart, because you sure sound like you need it.

Have a good day, man. You're not invisible to me, I hope you know that. Thank you for giving me the opportunity to read this >:3