Absolutely, positively, amazing.
Somehow, I walk into peace...
But why are my feelings the same?
I felt these two lines, they dont make sense, yet they make so much sense. Great job, Keep Writing!
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It comes from all around me,
Swirling above my head.
How do I want to feel?
Which way should I turn?
There, is that a ray of light...
Or just a mirage in the shadows?
Everything is stirred together,
Making me spin dizzily.
The storm rages and hisses,
Yet the sun is still shining upon it.
Vague images form in my mind...
Do I know anything for certain?
Angry wind pushes me away,
But it won't die down.
Emotions I want to understand,
They're just slipping further away.
Somehow, I walk into peace...
But why are my feelings the same?
Absolutely, positively, amazing.
Somehow, I walk into peace...
But why are my feelings the same?
I thought it was pretty good but is there a certain thing it's talking about? At first I thought it was love but now I don't think so. Overall, it was great!
Hey Teen, I'm Forti. Weird that you describe yourself as a teen weirdo, because it just so happens that I describe myself the same way! Anyways, loved this!
A few errors, never fear, no one is perfect!
teenweirdo said:
How do I want to feel?
Which way should I turn?
teen weirdo said:
Somehow, I walk into peace...But why are my feelings the same?
Swirling above my head.
How do I want to feel?
Which way should I turn? #FF0000 ">As the first stanza, nothing really popped out to me to continue reading. It didn't really have a hook, all it had was a, "Someone's confused and yeah."
There, is that a ray of light...
Or just a mirage in the shadows?
Everything is stirred together,
Making me spin dizzily. #FF0000 ">I don't believe dizzily is a proper word. Correct me If I'm wrong.
The storm rages and hisses,
Yet the sun is still shining upon it.
Vague images form in my mind...
Do I know anything for certain?
Angry wind pushes me away,
But it won't die down.
Emotions I want to understand,
They're just slipping further away. #FF0000 ">I adore this stanza.
Somehow, I walk into peace...
But why are my feelings the same?
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