I actually really liked this poem! The linking and repetition worked well for me, it really did. It feels like you've thought it through, which is nice. It all works together as well, and the way that it goes in a full circle is lovely. My problem is that it feels more like a surface read than a deep poem. It's beautifully written and crafted, but I can't find the message that you're conveying (or rather, not conveying) here. I don't know. It's lovely and pretty, but it doesn't feel like there's much going on beneath it, if you get me.
~Amy
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