Anna / Mom dad would tell you something.
Michael / if
Anna / "take a piece of turkey introduces you to his mouth"
Michael / daughter tell me that you want to tell us
Anna / "swallows turkey as if to swallow see its value and ends with another topic" know next week after this to be exact in 17 days there will be a camp, but rather a trip to central London where my group and I go to see the gallery.
Michael / As your teacher told me and because not all for art? for permission so do not worry about me and what you just tell your mother.
Anna / mom yes?
Julianne / only nods
finished dinner and collect the dishes to your room rregresa anna turns on the radio and start listening to Cindy Lauper and think it was cowardly but while tarateaba irls just wanna have fun an idea comes to mind as an idea so outlandish hair slash an idea that just a crazy girl would do ... hollywood escape alone, so here's the plan supposedly Anna galreiaanger towards London which is at the center where buses go to the airport.
Caroline / As suppose to travel without a parent signature.
Anna / Do not worry I have everything ready, in fact already voleto buy the tickets.
Caroline / ah, how?
Anna / easily made ??????my father sign a form that assumes the teacher asked Lewis to secure the permit, and as my father for his work never read things, just sign giving me permission to travel alone to LA.
Caroline / oh, right ... well I will miss you dear amiga.pero distance will not be a inpedimento for our friendship is forever.
The day has come aha Anna enlisted her bags to her mother goodbye with a kiss on the cheek and whispered a few words in his ear =
Anna / When I grow up I want to be an actress.
Julianne / Lose that's for sure and you can enjoy the ride. I LOVE YOU.
Michael always simple respect of farewells but this time it only took her daughter's hand and said, enjoy the ride,
without embrace this time and asked him to come back safe and sound and proonto ...Anna on hearing that he intended to stay but his heart did not allow him to think with your head if that embodied their hopes and dreams for a long carriage road, Anna got on the bus in the third seat of her friend RALP Caroline Turner. and djo all behind ...
I think this is a great concept for a story. I like to format of it; it's very creative, how it's sort of in a chatroom-like format. However, a few improvements I think you could make are on grammar and spelling. Sometimes it was a little hard to read. The ending was nice, though I think you might be able to add an extra sentence or an epilogue, as it seemed a little incomplete 
Overall, though, I love the idea and it's very well written! 
This story(no offense) needs some improvement. I think it could be better with punctuation and better grammar. I could not understand the following I just read. Anna's a pretty name though. Just try harder and let some juices flow.
Hey this could be promising but there are a lot of errors in your punctuation and grammar and your sentences tended not to make sense at some points.
But like I said you can build on this but you should make sure to sort out the other things.
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