Young Writers Society

I think you have a really good poem here! What I like most about this is the chaotic blend of elements. Normally, I'd say this is all too much, but it works with the subject matter and the chaos of messages in real life. Phone messages, text messages, email messages, verbal messages, all kinds of words and messages! So much to keep track of, I have trouble with it sometimes! Anyway, I like this poem a lot, and if you're already fixing the punctuation like your first review said, I think it's really good! Keep up the wonderful writing, and if you ever want another review, advice, or just a kind word, I'm only a Pm away!
- SOCKS

Other than the punctuation (already dealt with) I really liked this poem. Keep up the good work

Hi I'm pointe, and i am here to tear apart your poem sing praises of your poem

MessagesIn the air#FF0000 ">,
In our hair#FF0000 ">,
And Everywhere#FF0000 ">.
Lingering from lips#FF0000 ">,
Like drip drops of melted chocolate#FF0000 ">.
Seeping, oozing
Through cracks of s’mores#FF0000 ">.
And broken hearts#FF0000 ">,
Messages, messages#FF0000 ">.
Chasing us in our cars#FF0000 ">.
Pulling into driveways#FF0000 ">,
Garages#FF0000 ">.
And into our homes#FF0000 ">,
Where we go to rest
Every night#FF0000 ">.
Head cradled gently#FF0000 ">,
In the holds of a pillow#FF0000 ">.
Messages, messages#FF0000 ">.
In my eyes#FF0000 ">,
And as I look into yours#FF0000 ">.
My finger tracing your lips#FF0000 ">,
Memorizing their shape#FF0000 ">.
So I can find them#FF0000 ">,
When it is dark#FF0000 ">.
And when I am
Afraid#FF0000 ">.
Messages#FF0000 ">,
Left on my answering machine#FF0000 ">,
Telling me to call you#FF0000 ">.
But I am preoccupied#FF0000 ">.
With my youth
This excitement of loving#FF0000 ">.
I am a lung all filled up#FF0000 ">,
With oxygen#FF0000 ">,
And carbon#FF0000 ">,
Full of this sort of living#FF0000 ">.