animekaratepup wrote:I wrote this in, like, two minutes.
Edit: I CAN'T GET RID OF THE DOUBLE-SPACED LINES.
Hello!
How are you?
What's your name?
I think I know you,
Do you think the same?
What is this feeling?
It's like meeting an old friend
For the very first time
I don't know what should go here,
Sometimes it's hard to make things rhyme
Something goes here
Rousing, and moving
And now, it descends
It's soft and soothing
What is this thing we call a song?
I think it's possible
That I did something wrong…..
Yeah.
Pup, minimalism is attractive. It's a damn hard style and even more frustrating in execution after the fact. So pup, what have you got here?
A cute conversation and a little brunch for friends. Nice, if you like thin messages. There are once again decent lines here between nonsensical jargon that thinks it's communicating soo well. But it's not, and instead it's
just making noise.
Lyrics are a process, beat, and rhythm in mainly oral aspects. No, it's not for simply written aspect
s. As a lyricist, your job is to view both the spoken and accompaniment, then view it as well in how easily it can be sung and pronounced. Plus what is the style to be sung.....etc.
You still need diction here. You still need cohesion. You need to tie questions with how it would be sung.
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