Hey FatherFig!! Reese here for a review!
INTRODUCTION:
As someone that chooses to think intensely about even the most random and seemingly pointless topics, the truthful situation you have painted here is both something I have dealt with, as well as one I have mulled around in my mind for countless hours.
What is it to protect? Why does the role of protector seem to be thrust upon us? Why are we always so unprepared for the task at hand?
Poems written in the spoken word format are hard to critique in terms of formatting and language, as it's less about how you say it and more about what you have to say AND mostly about what those things mean. Personally, I don't much care for it because it tends to be very lacking in.....color, unless it's something that causes the mind and heart to react, which yours has!
On a realistic note, I do very much appreciate the story you tell, start to finish, both painting a vivid image of the emotion being experienced for those that can empathize or associate, as well as providing some closure to the entire thing when you admit defeat at the end.
Did you truly fail in your tasked role as protector? Or perhaps, was it that another shirked their duty, forcing it upon you, who also was in need of protecting...? Oh I could address this topic for days and days and days, especially when it comes to children and their ultimate need for protection from the cruel world they are dumped into.
My only question about the writing style: why the random forward/back slashes? Do they have meaning?
Thanks for letting me read your work! Feel free to reply with any notes or explanations, I love to learn about why you write what you write!
Reese
Points: 367
Reviews: 7
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