Personally, I think that sometimes people do things that are irrational. Sometimes words can stimulate things to happen. Like the messages in music tend to affect us. I do not think my reader has an IQ level lower than my own.
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Personally, I think that sometimes people do things that are irrational. Sometimes words can stimulate things to happen. Like the messages in music tend to affect us. I do not think my reader has an IQ level lower than my own.
One note, that turned me from hesitant to not wanting to review this at all:
WARNING: THINGS THAT HAPPEN IN THE POEM ARE NOT MEANT FOR YOU TO DO IN REAL LIFE!!! DO NOT GO OUT MURDERING PEOPLE WHO HAVE HURT YOU!!!
No one there to stop him,
no one there to love him,
no one told him this was wrong.
No one had been there to stop them when he was not strong.
I think your poem is awesome. It is very descriptive and emotional. I only have one suggestion
I wish you would change dirty plans because I think it is a weak word compared to the other words in the poem in relation to what you are talking about, which is murder.Does the person have a vendetta? Does he loathe the other people? Anyway I thought it was good. keep writing fiction.Head filled with dirty plans.
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