#FF0000 ">(as it was said before I'm not sure you can smell demons and the carcass bit is a bit random and does not make sense. as for the painted me black bit? i don't get it...why would he paint you black?)amiemalamie wrote:This again fits with the other poems I have submitted on here, which all tell the story of a girl who eventually commits suicide.#FF0000 ">(#FF0000 ">shouldn't this be bonds? since binds is a word that i am pretty sure does not exist)Once I stood in my human bindsI had smelled his demonic stench
Weighing heavy on my lungs
His carcass lay deep as he
Painted me black
#FF0000 ">other then these things it's a really good poem...better then mine i believe
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