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Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: Hmm...well...these are all some pretty interesting stories here. Each one was pretty unique but definitely very interesting to read in their own little ways. Well...more details down below.
Anyway let's get right to it,
He was a magic man. He lived in a little hovel on the mountain, where on hot summer nights he would blow smoke rings into the valley below. They lasted unnaturally long and glowed blue, sometimes pink. We in the village thought he was crazy. It was a well-known fact that only crazy people existed in a state of feral ecstasy: naked, wise, and alone.
As I was later to learn, magic was not an aberration, rather a manifestation of lucidity, a terrifying result of the active practice of being alive. The magic man on the mountain, with his smoke-rings and loincloth, was a god. And he was far more real than the golden abstraction we worshiped. That’s why no one ever made the climb, no one besides me that is.
Okay...well...that's a fun piece there...definitely covering quite a bit there in just that tiny paragraph. Showcasing the ignorance of a few people there and then their ideals about god...well...that was surprisingly deep there for a story that couldn't have been more than a couple hundred words at most. I liked that one quite a bit. Lots of magic on display as well...more backstory than you'd expect to have squeezed into a tiny story like that. All in all, that was great.
As we rocked between the blue waves, we felt our salty skin slipping into the sunlit water, the effervescent past. The islands rose out of the hazy horizon like a storm. They punctured our consciousness. They were a harsh reminder of the present, breaking the timeless motion of the sea.
Ooh...that is some really neat description there...it manages to capture quite a lot despite being so small...you can so easily imagine what this situation must be like. Just an overall wonderful job so far with the description and imagery throughout this piece.
The rope burned my tired hands. I pulled the sail tight and whooped. The desperation I had felt at watching the summer wane, watching the light turn slanted and gold and holy, fell away and I was flying. The sky and sea were blue for the moment and that was enough.
Oh dear...well...definitely capturing a sense of a long voyage there...I suppose. Not quite sure exactly what they're sailing towards, or where they're sailing but its a nice little snapshot of the situation that you would expect to find a person in if they were on a loong voyage on harsh seas that seemed neverending.
The jungle was verdant, virile, viral. To escape, I would scramble up a tree, limbs everywhere, wood and flesh becoming one. And I would swallow the sunset, filling my stomach with more life, more death, than I could contain.
Oh wow...that's some neat little alliteration right there...really pulling some attention to that paragraph straightaway and then the followup with just all the death and life...with sunsets...wow this story has been cranked right up to eleven there.
It was through this evening ritual that I first learned how to breathe fire. Above the jungle canopy, I learned how to hold onto the day's languid warmth and turn it into a firey burst of passion, fighting passion. The world is more alive at night. The jungle hums itself to sleep.
Well that's a powerful ending there...talking of a power discovered, then talking about the jungle as if it were a living thing..well...we've ended things off with quite a strong note here on this story.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall...this is a nice little collection of stories that you've got here. I liked all three of them and yeah...honestly...that's about all I've gotta say here.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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